I am a Year 5 student at Papakura Central School in Auckland, NZ. I am in KHH and my teacher is Whaea Sharlee and Whaea Tamzin. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Your poem is super cool, It has a really nice feeling of being lost and wandering, kind of in a panic with "Crashing" but started out really serenely with "Floating". I don't know, I think I can feel it both ways and the coloured background looks really nice and makes the poem feel nice and calm.
I really enjoy poetry and used to write poet at uni, I wonder if you picked this activity because you like it too?
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Hey Danielle,
ReplyDeleteYour poem is super cool, It has a really nice feeling of being lost and wandering, kind of in a panic with "Crashing" but started out really serenely with "Floating". I don't know, I think I can feel it both ways and the coloured background looks really nice and makes the poem feel nice and calm.
I really enjoy poetry and used to write poet at uni, I wonder if you picked this activity because you like it too?
See you later in the comments.
Daniel :)